my mum My mum is a gorilla because when me and dad play the game in the mum and dads room mum says play the game in the living room. Some time mum is kind because she makes chocolate cake and makes vegetable pie. she like to play sports like basketball and softball. My mum misses my uncle because he passed away and it was so sad.
my nan
My nan go to a tongan church and some time they give cake chocolate KFC tongan food. She likes talking on the phone with her friend and sometimes she is mad. Shes misses her son David and she likes going to the casino but she is not rich yet! she is just wasting too much money. I see her on saturday and sunday to go church some times it is boring but when it is finished we play with the kids.
I have 4 thing to change my writing number 1 my sentence don't make sense number
ReplyDeletenumber 2 full stops and capital letters for sentence with only 1 idea
number 3 complex detailed sentences as simple.
and number 4 was juicy word.